Today I finished my first revision for my close reading paper. I read through the comments on my initial draft several times and then began my revision process. This revision process is not as daunting as I remember it being since my first papers in elementary school. I feel like I can do this.
A common theme throughout my paragraphs was the need for more concrete/critical topic sentences. I will admit that I originally did not see any issues with my topic sentences. I thought that they captured the attention of the reader. I still believe that they captured the attention of the reader, but they did not necessarily inform the reader what the paragraph would be about.
Another issue with my paper that I addressed is the progression of my paper. To attempt to solve this, I rearranged the order of my papers to flow from Edna’s most oppressed moments to her most free moments. Originally I had gone in sequential order, but I believe that my rearranged order better flows and helps the paper to progress as a whole.
The last problem that I addressed or attempted to address was that of further developing my thesis statement. I tend to go for a one sentence thesis, but have been told in this class and previous English classes that the thesis is more than just the last sentence of your introductory paragraph. I do not feel as if I did this very well, but I tried. There is always room for improvement.
Turning in this revision, I do not necessarily feel that the paper is finished yet. I can’t quite let go of this paper yet, so just like Avril Lavigne’s 2007 song I will “keep holding on” for just a little bit longer. I am looking forward to receiving more feedback and hope to revise at least one more time before letting it go.